http://www.nmcommunityarts.org/community-arts-center/someone-read-my-essay-and-crtique-it/ Thu, 02 Feb 2012 04:48:59 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.2.1 http://www.nmcommunityarts.org/community-arts-center/someone-read-my-essay-and-crtique-it/#comment-1233 Menehune Fri, 05 Mar 2010 18:52:59 +0000 http://www.nmcommunityarts.org/community-arts-center/someone-read-my-essay-and-crtique-it#comment-1233 It is an excellent story. I would suggest that you slow it down somewhat and make clearer breaks between topics. You might break it into more paragraphs. The conclusion worked well for me. It summarized the story well without duplicating detail. I am not a writer but the painting names should have quotes or something. If you are preparing the document in Word, they have a grammar feature that gives readability statistics. I have personally found it to be helpful. Good luck!<br><b>References : </b><br> It is an excellent story.
I would suggest that you slow it down somewhat and make clearer breaks between topics. You might break it into more paragraphs.
The conclusion worked well for me. It summarized the story well without duplicating detail.
I am not a writer but the painting names should have quotes or something.
If you are preparing the document in Word, they have a grammar feature that gives readability statistics. I have personally found it to be helpful.
Good luck!
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